雅思G类大作文【青少年做兼职的利弊】范文赏析！

　　雅思G类大作文【青少年做兼职的利弊】范文赏析！有些G类大作文考题的难点在于，虽然主题是A，但对象是B，必须在A和B上都有相关的ideas和topic vocabulary积累，才能在TR和LR上有更好的表现。

　　本期整理关于“青少年做兼职工作的利弊”范文及分析过来，供大家学习参考ideas、段落结构和vocabulary。

　　In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to find part-time jobs. Some think this is a good development while others disagree.

　　Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

　　Some believe that teenagers ought to take part in hourly paid work while others feel this is not a good idea. In my opinion, though this can be an added burden for teenagers, it offers a host of benefits related to life experience.

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　　解析：第一句改述题目，第二句回应题目给出个人观点。替换表达包括：take part in = find, hourly paid work = part-time jobs, a good idea = a good development。观点句句式值得参考。

　　Opponents of part-time work for teenagers seize on the mental repercussions of stress. Teenagers already deal with so many life problems ranging from the chemical changes inherent in puberty to social stress to academic pressure. There are countries such as South Korea and Japan where the academic workload rarely allows for recreation time,let alone paid work. Adding in a job and its incumbent concerns can only worsen a teenager’s mental health and, in the most extreme cases, lead to depression and nervous breakdowns. Even students not affected as deeply are sure to be less happy due to stress.

　　解析：主体段1呼应开头段观点句的前半句，讨论题中“反方”的观点，opponents...seize on...可视为固定表达/模板句。中心句扣题并给出这种观点的原因，第二句拓展解释压力来源，第三句举例支撑(没用For example，但连接很自然)，第四句进一步解释兼职工作如何影响青少年心理健康。第五句补充，让论述更完整、充分、有说服力。词汇方面，G友们可以注意积累与压力有关的表达以及下划线标记的辅助论述的词汇短语。

　　Regardless, working is a maturing experience. Work continues and hastens the lifelong process of negotiating one’s own priorities against the expectations of others. Mosthigh schoolers start with a low-paying part-time position and that may educate them about the importance of having a good education. They are also likely to begin developing the qualities that will serve them well in a variety of future workplacesincluding teamwork skills, organisation, and perseverance. The experience will also give them a window into an industry and help them make more informed choices for their future career.

　　解析：主体段2呼应开头段中心句的后半句，是题中“正方”观点同时也是作者的个人观点。中心句直接给出观点，第二句解释工作的好处，第三句具体到高中生做兼职工作的好处，第三句继续展开，从另一个角度说明做兼职工作的好处，第四句小结做兼职工作的意义。目标7+G友可关注划线词汇，体会它们在连接和论述严谨方面发挥的作用。

　　In conclusion, though work can take a toll on mental well-being it is a positive, overall maturing experience. Teenagers should try a variety of jobs in order to have a clear overview of possible working environments.

　　组长解析：结尾段总结全文并重申观点，大家应注意范文使用了哪些词汇和短语来替换关键词、避免与前文用词发生重复。目标7+尤其要注重提升话题词汇的丰富度和准确度。